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Best Crying out for help Poems

(self explanatory) 2 entry each!


total challengers: 4   
1st
Nobody heard him, the dead man,
But still he lay moaning:
I was much further out than you thought
And not waving but drowning.

Poor chap, he always loved larking
And now he's dead
It must have been too cold for him his heart gave way,
They said.

Oh, no no no, it was too cold always
(Still the dead one lay moaning)
I was much too far out all my life
And not waving but drowning.

by Stevie Smith (see more)
 
jelly_jan
RATING: 4.5  VIEWS: 151  VOTES: 13

 

2nd
shadow in my head...



Hai,jz an0ther phaze im g0ing tru,,
y do i alwys hve 2 fail n evrythng i do?

Evrythng i wntd slipz paz tru my hnds, evrythng i nided always out of my reach,,

i fil lyk a cricket jz jumping frm 0ne uncertainty 2 an0ther insnity,
evrytym falin diper n2 oblivi0n,, stultification of me,,,
restless soul i am, lost n c0nfusd always questi0ning,,


in knee-deep pain, ache n my head i knw m g0in nsane,,


close my eyes darknes envolpes me, coldnes wraps 8s arms 2 me,, a welcome relief
in a c0mforting bliss, tearz faling down my cheekz,,

cheeky smyl, br8 eyes hd bin stolen by d n8..


G0ne wat i usd 2 be, i dnt even knw me,, n0t a glimpse n0t a single
trace of myslf, of my history..

Silent cries 1derin thoughts,,help me save myself frm me,,, (see more)
 
sixty67s3v3n
RATING: 4.3  VIEWS: 85  VOTES: 3

 

3rd
Sometimes when I'm aloneI cry,Cause I am on my ownThe tears I cry are bitter and warmThey flow with life but take no form.I cry because my heart is torn.i find it difficult to carry on.If i had an ear to confinding,I would cry among my treasured friend.
but who do you know that stops that long.,
to help another carry on.
The world moves fast and rather pass by,
then to stop and see what makes one cry.
so painful and sad.
And sometimes......
I cry
and no one cares about why
 (see more)
 
canesfan28
RATING: 4.2  VIEWS: 284  VOTES: 6

 

4th
My emotions overflow
Into an ocean of despair
Where unknown things are roaming
In need of much repair
Im forced beneath my depth
Unheeded is my heart
An unexplored current
Swept away without a chart
Mayday mayday mayday
My hearts in desperate need
And yet again my hearts ignored
Forced alone to bleed
Shall i be forgotten
In a city beneath the sand
Or shall i rise above
Onto a thriving land
I feel like i am drowning
Flooded is my mind
Eyes are all around me
Yet to me they are but blind
How i wish to ebb and flow
A heart with no distress
But storms are brewing in this shell
And hidden in this mess
Shall they ever surface
Exposing inner faces
Or shall they be but silent
In cloudy hidden places (see more)
 
POETICA
RATING: 4.2  VIEWS: 108  VOTES: 5





Comments

skyegarcia
skyegarcia all-star
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
i liked it.
swtmandamay
swtmandamay HOFer
over 3 years ago
canesfan28
canesfan28 all-star
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
lol. but it takes time to be good at writeing poems
jelly_jan
jelly_jan all-IBY
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
yes..im bad at it..haha
canesfan28
canesfan28 all-star
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
have u ever tried to write a poem?
jelly_jan
jelly_jan all-IBY
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
nah...i just like reading them
canesfan28
canesfan28 all-star
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
o cuz ive seen a couple of ur comps about poems
jelly_jan
jelly_jan all-IBY
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
this poem is pretty famous! i first found it when i was doing English A levels.
jelly_jan
jelly_jan all-IBY
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
no..i dont write poems..i like reading them :)
canesfan28
canesfan28 all-star
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
do u write ur own poems?
iwashere
iwashere icon
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
i was much too far out all of my life.. and not waving but drowning...
iwashere
iwashere icon
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
where did u find it ?
jelly_jan
jelly_jan all-IBY
over 3 years ago
re: Not Waving but drowning
i love this poem.
iwashere
iwashere icon
over 3 years ago
 
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IBY Awards (2)

“title saids it all”
— Skyscraper awarded Not Waving but drowning
over 3 years ago
“GREAT”
— swtmandamay awarded Not Waving but drowning
over 3 years ago