competition: words (love or hate): best original poem

entry: Pablo Neruda - Love song by Ama9a

Tonight I can write the saddest lines.
Write, for example: "The night is shattered,
and the blue stars shiver in the distance."
The night wind revolves in the sky and sings.
Tonight I can write the saddest lines.
That I loved her, and sometimes she loved me too.
On nights like this one, I held her in my arms.
I kissed her again and again under the endless sky.
She loved me, and sometimes I loved her too.
Tonight I can write the saddest lines.
To think that I do not have her. To feel I have lost her.
To hear the immense night, still more immense without her.
And the verse falls to the soul like dew to the pasture.
What does it matter that my love could not keep her.
The night is shattered, and she is not with me....
Because through nights like this one I held her in my arms,
my soul is not satisfied that it has lost her.
Though this be the last pain that she makes me suffer,
and these the last verses that I write for her.

Comments

 
 
Ama9a
Ama9a all-star
about 1 year ago
re: Pablo Neruda - Love song
Thanks everyone ;)
Adroit
Adroit all-american
about 1 year ago
re: Pablo Neruda - Love song
freaking Awesome!!!!
jishjosh
jishjosh all-IBY
about 1 year ago
Shlinki
Shlinki HOFer
about 1 year ago
re: Pablo Neruda - Love song
wow :) very nice!
Ama9a
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